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The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink.

The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink. ggeA
The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink. First of all, the saltwater is taken from the sea and passed through the pre-treatment filter which at this stage big impurities are removed. Besides, the filter backwash is piped into the sea. Subsequently, the water is forced through membrane at high pressure that all impurities even salt are gotten stuck within the filter. It should be noted that in this step the seawater concentrate is returned into the sea. After that, some substances such as lime, chlorine and fluoride are added to the water to make it appropriate for drinking. Afterwards, the water is supplied and finally it is piped into the integrated water supply system to be used by people. To sum up, the water of sea should be passed through some filters and treated by some materials to be healthy for people.
The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the
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water
from
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sea
can turn into the suitable
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water
that
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people
can drink.

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First of all
, the saltwater
is taken
from the
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sea
and passed through the pre-treatment
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filter
which at this stage
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big
impurities
are removed
.
Besides
, the
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filter
backwash
is piped
into the
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sea
.
Subsequently
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is forced
through membrane at high pressure that all impurities even salt
are gotten
stuck within the
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filter
. It should
be noted
that in this step the seawater concentrate
is returned
into the
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sea
. After that,
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some
substances such as lime, chlorine and fluoride are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the
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water
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it appropriate for drinking. Afterwards, the
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water
is supplied
and
finally
it
is piped
into the integrated
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water
supply system to be
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used
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To sum up, the
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water
of
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sea
should
be passed
through
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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filters
and treated by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
materials to be healthy for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
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IELTS academic The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
158 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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