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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages? 32QJ
The given bar chart compares the contribution of different industries in Brazil by percentage over a period of ten years with a prediction for 2029. Overall, finance industry experienced an upward trend, while manufacturing sector showed a gradual decrease through out the period. However, tourism seems to be constant from 2019 onwards. In 2019, finance and oil, coal & gas increased by 5% which is 35% and 30% respectively. Food processing unit spiked up rapidly by exactly one in ten for the same year. However, it is worth noticing that manufacturing and tourism industry’s contribution experienced a steady decline in 2019. Looking at the prediction for 2020, finance segment dominates Brazil’s market which is approximately 42%. It is interesting to see the food processing unit is expected to go back to the same number as it was in the beginning of the period. On the other hand, manufacturing industry’s rate was about 22% in 2009, it is now forecasted to significantly drop to 5%.
The
given
bar chart compares the contribution of
different
industries
in Brazil by percentage over a period of ten years with a prediction for 2029.

Overall
, finance
industry
experienced an upward trend, while manufacturing sector
showed
a gradual decrease
through out
the period.
However
, tourism seems to be constant from 2019 onwards.

In 2019, finance and oil, coal & gas increased by 5% which is 35% and 30%
respectively
. Food processing unit spiked up
rapidly
by exactly one in ten for the same year.
However
, it is worth noticing that manufacturing and tourism
industry’s
contribution experienced a steady decline in 2019.

Looking at the prediction for 2020, finance segment dominates Brazil’s market which is approximately 42%. It is interesting to
see
the food processing unit is
expected
to go back to the same number as it was in the beginning of the period.
On the other hand
, manufacturing
industry’s
rate was about 22% in 2009, it is
now
forecasted to
significantly
drop to 5%.
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IELTS academic These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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