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The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink.

The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink. e5BwV
The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink. First of all, the saltwater is taken from the sea and passed through the pre-treatment filter which at this stage big impurities are removed. Besides, the filter backwash is piped into the sea. Subsequently, the water is forced through membrane at high pressure that all impurities even salt are gotten stuck within the filter. It should be noted that in this step the seawater concentrate is returned into the sea. After that, some substances such as lime, chlorine and fluoride are added to the water to make it appropriate for drinking. Afterwards, the water is supplied and finally it is piped into the integrated water supply system to be used by people.
The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the
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water
from
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sea
can turn into the suitable
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water
that
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people
can drink.

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First of all
, the saltwater
is taken
from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sea
and passed through the pre-treatment filter which at this stage
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big
impurities
are removed
.
Besides
, the filter backwash
is piped
into the
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sea
.
Subsequently
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is forced
through membrane at high pressure that all impurities even salt
are gotten
stuck within the filter. It should
be noted
that in this step the seawater concentrate
is returned
into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sea
. After that,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
substances such as lime, chlorine and fluoride are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the
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water
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it appropriate for drinking. Afterwards, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is supplied
and
finally
it
is piped
into the integrated
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water
supply system to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
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IELTS academic The diagram demonstrates the process of desalination and how the water from sea can turn into the suitable water that people can drink.

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