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male and female in further education

male and female in further education 56XyB

the graph above compares amount of male and female of United Kingdom in attending further education, both part time and full time, throughout 1970s until 1990s. in general, the dates shows quite significant rising in both side and in each period of time. it is also clear that majority of them prefered studying part-time than ful-ltime in that period. the chart of part-time men student had been a little bit fluctuatione if it is compared with full-time one which always shows stability and developed considerably. in 1990s, part-time men student were decreased about 100. 000 in number. although it is increased again in the period after, it is not as much as before as in 1970s. UK's women had been much less than men in attending further education. nevertheless, their number growth gradually. both part-time and full-time women student were increased in 1970s. the amount of full-time women even more than the men ones in that time. in the next period, the number of part-time women student were rocketing. the full-time one also increased even though it is not as rapid as the part-time one.

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