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Write a paragraph (120-150 words) about a dramatic accident /incident. It can be true or imaginary.

Write a paragraph (120-150 words) about a dramatic accident /incident. It can be true or imaginary. kWKR8
My grandfather had an accident two years ago. It happened on a time morning when he did exercise by his bike. He drove very slow and prepare to turn but there was a motorbike coming and crashed to my grandfather. After that, he felt dizzy breathless and very hurt in his left leg. The man in the motorbike went to my grandfather to check what was wrong. The man was quickly walked to he and first aid for him because his left leg was broken and couldn’t move. Then he was admitted to hospital. The man who cashed his motorbike into my grandfather was very worried and called my family. After 15 minutes, my uncle and my grandmother went to hospital. Luckily, if not get first aid in time, he would have been danger to life. After a few weeks, he couldn’t do anything with his leg so he felt terrible. But now, he is fine and can do exercise.
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had an accident two years ago. It happened on a time morning when he did exercise by his bike. He drove
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slow and prepare to turn
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but
there was a motorbike coming and crashed to my
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grandfather
. After that, he felt dizzy breathless and
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hurt in his
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leg. The
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in the motorbike went to my
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grandfather
to
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what was
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. The
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his
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was broken
and couldn’t
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move
. Then he
was admitted
to hospital. The
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man
who cashed his motorbike into my
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grandfather
was
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worried and called my family. After 15 minutes, my uncle and my grandmother went to hospital. Luckily, if not
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get
first
aid in time, he would have been
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danger
to life. After a few weeks, he couldn’t do anything with his leg
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so
he felt terrible.
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But
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now
, he is fine and can do exercise.
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IELTS academic Write a paragraph (120-150 words) about a dramatic accident /incident. It can be true or imaginary.

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