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The diagram below shows the stages of processing cocoa beans. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.

The given diagram illustrates three phases of producing the cocoa beans, which to obtain different forms of coco beans, In the first stage of process, started with picked the entire beans and their shells and then will have dried. In the next stage will compressing by two phases, produce two different forms of beans, namely further squeezing and further refining, the squeezing phase, which form cocoa cake and other form the industrial chocolate, in addition to produced sugar as well. The third and final stage, the cocoa cake will grinding into forms, cocoa powder and cocoa liquor, furthermore, the cocoa powder is transferred to the market, meanwhile, the cocoa liquor will be using for industrial sector, for instance cakes and drinks, otherwise, the industrial chocolate will be processing then packaging for transfer to the market. Overall, the producing of cocoa beans is considering complex process, which is passed to various phases, have different form for each.
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diagram illustrates three
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of producing the cocoa
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beans
, which to obtain
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different
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forms
of coco beans,

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first
stage of process,
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started
with picked the entire
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beans
and their shells and then will have dried. In the
next
stage will
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compressing
by two
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phases
, produce two
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different
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forms
of
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beans
,
namely
further
squeezing and
further
refining, the squeezing
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phase
, which
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form
cocoa cake and other
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form
the industrial chocolate,
in addition
to produced sugar
as well
.

The third and final stage, the cocoa cake will
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grinding
into
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forms
, cocoa powder and cocoa liquor,
furthermore
, the cocoa powder
is transferred
to the market, meanwhile, the cocoa liquor will be using for industrial sector,
for instance
cakes and drinks,
otherwise
, the industrial chocolate will be processing then packaging for transfer to the market.

Overall
, the producing of cocoa
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beans
is considering complex process, which
is passed
to various
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phases
, have
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different
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form
for each.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages of processing cocoa beans. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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