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The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. kOOW
The diagram explains the way in which aluminuim cans are converted for reusing. Overall, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with collected cans and ending up with reusing products. First of all, utilized tins are sorted in specially prepared containers. After that emissions are collected by lorries. The collected cans are transferred to a cabin to undergo processes like cleaning, sorting, shredding, and compressing. Following that, compressed materials will have treated and melted in a boiler. Subsequently, a roll of aluminium with a thickness of 2. 5-6 mm will come out, after which the resulting product is processed for making the cans. Finally, the cans are send out to shops, as example, in UK the 74% of tins are recycled.
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explains
the way in which
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aluminuim
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cans
are converted
for reusing.
Overall
, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with collected
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cans
and ending up with reusing products.
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First of all
, utilized tins
are sorted
in
specially
prepared containers.
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After
that emissions
are collected
by lorries. The collected
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cans
are transferred
to a cabin to undergo processes like cleaning, sorting, shredding, and compressing.

Following that, compressed materials will have treated and melted in a boiler.
Subsequently
, a roll of
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aluminium
with a thickness of 2. 5-6 mm will
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come
out, after which the resulting product
is processed
for making the
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cans
.
Finally
, the
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cans
are
Consider using a past participle here: "sent".
send
out to shops, as example, in UK the 74% of tins
are recycled
.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans.

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