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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. wkpq
The two pie charts draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities. Overall, equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music, but a dramatically larger number of girls liked reading. There were also many differences in terms of the children's preferred sports. Turning to the first chart, we can observe that boys prefer playing computer games (34% participation rate) than taking other activities. Playing basketball comes as the second most popular leisure, practiced by almost a third of male children. Basketball is followed by soccer, which is exercised by 17%. Skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable activities, chosen by 11% and 10% of boys respectively. Reading, the least popular cultural activity among boys, represents only two percent. Taking a closer look at the second chart, we can see that girls' most preferred activity is dancing, being 27% of the total. In contrast to the boys' preferences, reading is chosen by more than a fifth of all girls. Although percentage of female children who play computer games is roughly twice less than that of boys (16%), this activity is third most popular on the girls' chart. With a slight difference between computer games and netball, the latter is practiced at 15% rate. Similarly to skateboarding popularity among boys, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music comes as the least popular leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the first chart.
The two pie
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draw the conclusion of a survey of boys' and girls' cultural and leisure activities.

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, equal quantities of both sexes enjoyed listening to music,
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larger number of girls liked reading. There were
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differences in terms of the children's preferred sports.

Turning to the
first
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, we can observe that
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boys
prefer playing computer games (34% participation rate) than taking other
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activities
. Playing basketball
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as the second most
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leisure, practiced by almost a third of male children. Basketball
is followed
by soccer, which
is exercised
by 17%. Skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable
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activities
, chosen by 11% and 10% of
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boys
respectively
. Reading, the least
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cultural
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, represents
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two percent.

Taking a closer look at the second
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, we can
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that girls' most preferred
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is dancing, being 27% of the total.
In contrast
to the boys' preferences, reading
is chosen
by more than a fifth of all girls. Although percentage of female children who play computer games is roughly twice less than that of
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(16%), this
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is third most
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on the girls'
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. With a slight difference between computer games and netball, the latter
is practiced
at 15% rate.
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boys
, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music
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as the least
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leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the
first
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.

IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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