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The diagram below shows the process of canning of fish.

The diagram below shows the process of canning of fish. BJnW5
The flowchart illustrates the stages of preserving of fish. Overall, it is man-made and non-cyclic process, which has fifteen steps begin with catching or fishing to fish from pond river or sea and ending with dispatch canned fish to supermarket. It include varius procedure namely freezing, storing, thawing, cooling and Storing. In the first step, fish is being fished by fishermen using fishing-rods and fishing-reels or catched by fishing-nets. Fish are being transported to the freezing plant. After this stage, fish is being freezed and stored. Before weighing of fish, it is being unloaded. Then fish are being thawed and cut into big pieces. Next, big pieces of fish, are being steam cooked into cooker and cooled it. This step involves, filling or cutting big pieces in small pieces. Subsequently, small pieces are being canned; at the same time, Brine water or oil are added. In the next step, Sealing it and sterilizing by heating. In final step, Canned fish packets are being dispatched to Supermarket.
The flowchart illustrates the stages of preserving of fish.

Overall
, it is
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-made and non-cyclic process, which has fifteen
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steps
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with catching or fishing to fish from pond river or sea and ending with dispatch canned fish to supermarket. It
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varius
procedure
namely
freezing, storing, thawing, cooling and Storing.

In the
first
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, fish is
being fished
by fishermen using fishing-rods and fishing-reels or
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catched
by fishing-nets. Fish are
being transported
to the freezing plant. After this stage, fish is being
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freezed
and stored.
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weighing of fish, it is
being unloaded
. Then fish are
being thawed
and
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into
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big
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pieces
.
Next
,
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big
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pieces
of fish, are being steam cooked into cooker and cooled it.

This
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involves, filling or cutting
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big
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in
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small
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pieces
.
Subsequently
,
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small
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are
being canned
; at the same time, Brine water or oil are
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added
. In the
next
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, Sealing it and sterilizing by heating. In final
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, Canned fish packets are
being dispatched
to Supermarket.
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