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The diagram below shows the percentage of death from heart diseases and cancer, and calories consumed from processed food in different countries.The diagram below shows the percentage of death from heart diseases and cancer, and calories consumed from processed food in different countries.

The given Chart provide information about proportion of death from heart dieses, cancer and calories consumed from processed food in 12 different countries. According to Bar chat a paradoxical pattern is observed. It is evident that highest death from heart disease and cancer as lowest calories from processed food can be seen in Hungary at 88% and 8% respectively. Every 8th out of 10th people suffers from cancer and death by heart disease in USA. Whereas Belgium, Sweden and Finland proportion remain between 60% to 70%. Countries like Portugal, Venezuela, and Greece lies between 30% to 50%. Heart disease and cancer patients in Mexico, Korea, Thailand and Laos ratio is less below 20% in this country (23%, 19%, 10%, 2% respectively). On other hand, proportion of Calories consumed from processed food is opposite then heart disease and cancer. Highest count of patients was admitted in Laos, followed by Thailand, then Korea (92%, 70%, 60%). Moreover, countries like Mexico, Greece, Venezuela, Portugal, Finland, Sweden, Belgium are in range of 10% to 50%. Overall, it is clear that in the country where death heart disease and cancer is at most, observed low ratio of calories consumed from processed food.

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