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The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999.

The bar chart compares the access to facilities such as refrigerator, electricity, and water among three categories of families based on their economic condition in Ghana over the period of seven years. At the first glance, it is clear that wealthy families had far better access to these facilities, and the availability to electricity and fridge deteriorated among needy households. As far as very destitute families are concerned, a negligible percentage of them had access to fridge in 1991/92 and it remained the same in 1998/99. Access to electrical energy declined by 14% over the given period while water access was given to over a half of such families in 1991/92, and it saw a small rise after seven years. When it comes to poverty-stricken families, a gradual drop can be seen in percentage of citizens having access to fridge. A similar trend can be observed in needy households’ access to electric power which fell from 57% to 48%. Moreover, there was no change in percentage of households with access to water, and the figure was seven in ten. In terms of the wealthy, there was an increasing trend in proportion of citizens who used these amenities.
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to facilities such as refrigerator, electricity, and water among three categories of
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families
based on their economic condition in Ghana over the period of seven years. At the
first
glance, it is
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that wealthy
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had far better
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access
to these facilities, and the availability to electricity and fridge deteriorated among needy households.

As far as
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destitute
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families
are concerned
, a negligible percentage of them had
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access
to fridge in 1991/
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it remained the same in 1998/99.
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to electrical energy declined by 14% over the
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period while water
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was
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to over a half of such
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families
in 1991/92, and it
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rise after seven years.

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to poverty-stricken
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, a gradual drop can be
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seen
in percentage of citizens having
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access
to fridge. A similar trend can
be observed
in needy households’
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access
to electric power which fell from 57% to 48%.
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, there was no
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change
in percentage of households with
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access
to water, and the figure was seven in ten.

In terms of the wealthy, there was an increasing trend in proportion of citizens who
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used
these amenities.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999.

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