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The diagram below shows the information about the amount of money spent on alcohol and drugs.

The diagram below shows the information about the amount of money spent on alcohol and drugs. yNKwD
The given bar chart revels information regarding expenses spent on alcohol and drugs. in between years 1975 to 1992. At a glance, alcohol was highest selling product in these years in comparison to drugs. It is shown in chart that around 140 US$ was spent on alcohol in 1975 and 1977, and then in 1980 shot up to nearly 185 $ billion. However, sudden reduction to $100 in 1985 followed by raise in 1992 up to $145 billon. On the other hand, spending drugs also shown in similar pattern. In 1975 and 1977, it remained approximately US$ 40 billion and then swelled to US$ 100 in 1980. Nut it came down to $ 60 in 1985 only to shot up again to $100 in 1992. Finally, it is seen that spending in alcohol and drugs did not decreased over period os seven years. It was almost same in 1992 as it was in 1975.
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bar chart revels information regarding expenses spent on
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alcohol
and
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drugs
.
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in
between years 1975 to 1992. At a glance,
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alcohol
was
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highest
selling product in these years
in comparison
to
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drugs
. It
is shown
in chart that around 140 US$
was spent
on
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alcohol
in 1975 and 1977, and then in 1980 shot up to
nearly
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185 $
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billion
.
However
, sudden reduction to $100 in 1985 followed by raise in 1992 up to $145
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billon
.
On the other hand
, spending
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drugs
also
shown in similar pattern. In 1975 and 1977, it remained approximately US$ 40 billion and then swelled to US$ 100 in 1980. Nut it came down to
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$60".
$ 60
in 1985
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only
to shot up again to $100 in 1992.
Finally
, it is
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seen
that spending in
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alcohol
and
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drugs
did not
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decreased
over period
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os
seven years. It was almost same in 1992 as it was in 1975.
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