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In a bar chart, you will often be asked to write a report which compares 2 things. In the above graph, you should describe differences at 2 different times (1992 and 2000) and also differences between the IT and service industries.

In a bar chart, you will often be asked to write a report which compares 2 things. In the above graph, you should describe differences at 2 different times (1992 and 2000) and also differences between the IT and service industries. yNKkD
Mainly the bar chart given here is indicating about the percentage of gross domestic product from IT and Service Industry of the UK from year 1992 to 2000. From the bar chart the we can see that, there is an exponential growth in Service Industry over the years till 2000 comparingly to IT Industry we can see a bit of ups and downs. Majorly we can see the increase in IT Industry during 1992 to 1994, following that we can see a dip of slight margin under 8 during 1996. But we can see a huge difference of growth in 1998 to 2000 upto 15 times. Whereas, in Service Industry we can see an eliptical increase over the year's of 1992 to 2000. To conclude, the IT Industry had a doubled increase in the percentage of GDP than Service Industry and we can see a completely beneficial product from IT Industry.
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here is indicating about the percentage of gross domestic product from IT and
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Service
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Industry
of the UK from year 1992 to 2000.

From the bar chart
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that, there is an exponential growth in
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over the years till 2000
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to IT
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we can
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see
a bit of ups and downs.

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we can
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see
the increase in IT
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during 1992 to 1994, following that we can
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see
a dip of slight margin under 8 during 1996.
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a huge difference of growth in 1998 to 2000
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we can
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increase over the year's of 1992 to 2000.

To conclude
, the IT
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Industry
had a doubled increase in the percentage of GDP than
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a completely beneficial product from IT
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IELTS academic In a bar chart, you will often be asked to write a report which compares 2 things. In the above graph, you should describe differences at 2 different times (1992 and 2000) and also differences between the IT and service industries.

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