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A line graph is similar to a bar chart, except you should describe trends (changes over a period of time). In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food.

A line graph is similar to a bar chart, except you should describe trends (changes over a period of time). In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food. 6d8RW
To start with, the given line graph is an information radiator of fast food consumption for number of times eaten by Australian Teenegers during the period from 1975 to 2000's for various types for example pizza, fish and chips, and hamburgers. From the chart we can see that Fish and chips was highly consumed during the year 1975 reaching the top limit of 100 times, and comparing to pizza and hamburgers being the least consumed around 10 times during the year. Overtime the time we can observe that there is an increase in demand for consumption of hamburgers reaching to 100 times during 2000's. Following it, pizza being the second most consumed during the 2000 and there is a vast dip in intake of Fish and Chips. To end with a note that the teenagers had developed more interest in consumption of hamburgers and pizza which inversed the intake of fish and chips and the trends have changed drastically over the time.
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line graph is an information radiator of
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food consumption for number of
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eaten by Australian
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Teenegers
during the period from 1975 to
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2000's
for various types
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pizza, fish and chips, and hamburgers.

From the chart we can
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that Fish and chips was
highly
consumed during the year 1975 reaching the top limit of 100
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times
, and comparing to pizza and hamburgers being the least consumed around 10
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times
during the year.

Overtime the
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time
we can observe that there is an increase in demand for consumption of hamburgers reaching to 100
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times
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during 2000's
. Following it, pizza being the second most consumed during the 2000 and there is a vast dip in intake of Fish and Chips.

To
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end
with a note that the
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teenagers
had developed more interest in consumption of hamburgers and pizza which
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inversed
the intake of fish and chips and the trends have
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changed
drastically
over the
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IELTS academic A line graph is similar to a bar chart, except you should describe trends (changes over a period of time). In the above line graph, you should compare the changing trends between 1975 and 2000, and the differences between the three types of fast food.

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4 paragraphs
162 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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