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The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020.

The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020. 0wp5B
Through out the whole time peroid from 1975 to 2010, the general allocation of the buildings and the facilities are pretty similar. For example the position of the sports and Lecture rooms are still respectively the nortwest and the southeast corner of the college. However, there are still some alterations in the spot A new Science Building was built near the music centre and the Car park was expanded, which, causes less free space. So the space for the library had to be divided in half, in exchange of the IT Center The projected building however, was planned to build in the middle of the sports field, inspite the possible conquence of the not adequae space for the outdoor playground.
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the whole time
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peroid
from 1975 to 2010, the general allocation of the buildings and the facilities are pretty similar.
For example
the position of the sports and Lecture rooms are
still
respectively
the
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nortwest
and the southeast corner of the college.

However
, there are
still
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some
alterations in the spot A new Science Building
was built
near the music
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centre
and the Car park
was expanded
, which, causes less free space.
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So
the space for the library had to
be divided
in half,
The usual prepositions to use after "in exchange" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "in exchange for"?
in exchange of
the IT Center

The projected building
however
,
was planned
to build in the middle of the sports field,
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inspite
the possible
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conquence
of the not
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adequae
space for the outdoor playground.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020.

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120 words
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