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The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020.

The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020. 0wp5B

Through out the whole time peroid from 1975 to 2010, the general allocation of the buildings and the facilities are pretty similar. For example the position of the sports and Lecture rooms are still respectively the nortwest and the southeast corner of the college. However, there are still some alterations in the spot A new Science Building was built near the music centre and the Car park was expanded, which, causes less free space. So the space for the library had to be divided in half, in exchange of the IT Center The projected building however, was planned to build in the middle of the sports field, inspite the possible conquence of the not adequae space for the outdoor playground.

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peroid
 from 1975 to 2010, the general allocation of the buildings and the facilities are pretty similar. For example
 the position of the sports and Lecture rooms are still
respectively
 the Possible spelling mistake found.northwestNorthwest
nortwest
 and the southeast corner of the college.

However
, there are still
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 alterations in the spot A new Science Building was built
 near the music Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 and the Car park was expanded
, which, causes less free space. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 the space for the library had to be divided
 in half, The usual prepositions to use after "in exchange" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "in exchange for"?in exchange for
in exchange of
 the IT Center

The projected building however
, was planned
 to build in the middle of the sports field, Possible spelling mistake found.inspirein spite
inspite
 the possible Possible spelling mistake found.consequenceconfluencecongruenceConfluence
conquence
 of the not Possible spelling mistake found.adequate
adequae
 space for the outdoor playground. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2010, and the projected building in 2020.

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American English

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120 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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