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The graph below shows the cinema attendance of people on different days of the week in 2003, 2005, and 2007. SUmmrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the cinema attendance of people on different days of the week in 2003, 2005, and 2007. SUmmrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. 6mldW
The bar chart highlights the percentage of people loving to go to the cinema on wishful days of a week, between 2003 and 2007. Overall, it is clear from the chart that the majority preferred to go to the cinema on weekends than weekdays. Additionally, Saturday was the day of cinema for most people. To look in detail, on Mondays of 2003, around 7% of people tended to go to the cinema, but after 4 years the percentage went down slightly to above 5%. The same reduction occured with the rate of cinema lovers who went to the cinema on Thursdays and Sundays and whose index made up over 10% and roughly 22% in 2003, 10% in 2005 and 2007, and just above 20% in 2005 and 2007, accordingly. On Tuesdays and Saturdays of 2003, respectively, approximately 9% and over 25% of people, which increased slightly to 10% and around 28% in 2007, were used to visiting cinemas. On the other hand, the index of people who used to go to the cinema on Wednesdays and Fridays did not experience any change over the given period.
The bar chart highlights the percentage of
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people
loving to go to the
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cinema
on wishful days of a week, between 2003 and 2007.

Overall
, it is
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clear
from the chart that the majority preferred to go to the
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cinema
on weekends than weekdays.
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, Saturday was the day of
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cinema
for most
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people
.

To look in detail, on Mondays of 2003, around 7% of
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people
tended to go to the
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cinema
,
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after 4 years the percentage went down
slightly
to above 5%. The same reduction
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occured
with the rate of
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cinema
lovers who went to the
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cinema
on Thursdays and Sundays and whose index made up over 10% and roughly 22% in 2003, 10% in 2005 and 2007, and
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above 20% in 2005 and 2007,
accordingly
. On Tuesdays and Saturdays of 2003,
respectively
, approximately 9% and over 25% of
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people
, which increased
slightly
to 10% and around 28% in 2007, were
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used
to visiting cinemas.

On the other hand
, the index of
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people
who
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used
to go to the
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cinema
on Wednesdays and Fridays did not experience any
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change
over the
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given
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the cinema attendance of people on different days of the week in 2003, 2005, and 2007. SUmmrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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