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The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below. qPMp
The given diagram shows the changes, which occurred in a coastal town, Pentland, between 1950 and 2007. It can be seen that the area developed a lot in the given period of 57 years. In 1950, Pentland was located towards the south of the sea. There was a straight main road bisecting the town into two. Two side roads were there, one to the left and the other to the right. The left road led to an industrial area, whereas the right one led to the car park. The rest of the area was mainly grassland. 57 years later, the sea was developed as a Yacht Marina, circled by a newly built road, which was linked to the original straight road. Many apartments were built to the right. The industrial area on the left was replaced by a park, a swimming pool and a multi-storey car park. The side roads were shifted further southwards. The car park on the right was removed and many apartments were built in its place. On the south-east corner of Pentland, many houses were built and a cinema was constructed in the corner between the main road and the left side road. Many shops were opened along the northern side of both side roads. Overall, Pentland developed into a busy commercial coastal town over a half century.
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diagram
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shows
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changes
, which occurred in a coastal town,
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Pentland
, between 1950 and 2007. It can be
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seen
that the
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area
developed a lot in the
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given
period of 57 years.

In 1950,
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Pentland
was located
towards the south of the sea. There was a straight main
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road
bisecting the town into two. Two side
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roads
were there, one to the
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left
and the other to the
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right
. The
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left
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road
led to an industrial
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area
, whereas the
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right
one led to the car
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park
. The rest of the
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area
was
mainly
grassland.

57 years later, the sea
was developed
as a Yacht Marina, circled by a
newly
built
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road
, which
was linked
to the original straight
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road
.
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Many
apartments
were built
to the
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right
. The industrial
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area
on the
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left
was replaced
by a
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park
, a swimming pool and a
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multi-storey
car
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park
. The side
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roads
were shifted
further
southwards.
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The
car
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park
on the
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right
was removed
and
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many
apartments
were built
in its place. On the south-east corner of
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Pentland
,
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many
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houses
were built
and a cinema
was constructed
in the corner between the main
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road
and the
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left
side
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road
.
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Many
shops
were opened
along the northern side of both side roads.

Overall
,
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Pentland
developed into a busy commercial coastal town over a half century.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

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