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The pictures below show the plan of Walton Museum in 2008 and the plan in 2012, after it was redeveloped. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pictures below show the plan of Walton Museum in 2008 and the plan in 2012, after it was redeveloped. DPWp
The given maps depict the development of Walton Museum between 2008 and 2012. Massive changes took place in just four years. In 2008, the South wing had two storeys with a path on the west of it. On the first floor, there was a special exhibition room, a shop and a cloakroom. The entrance and reception were on the second floor. Stairs were there between the shop and the cloakroom. Next to reception was a reading room. By the year 2012, this building had four storeys with a lift from the first floor to the top floor. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloakroom, which was moved to the reception. On the second floor, a self-service café was opened towards the eastern side of the lift above the reading room. On the west of the lift, above the reception and cloakroom, a restaurant was constructed. Another exhibition room was built on the topmost floor above the café. Above the special exhibition room, an entrance hall was made, which had a terrace above it. Overall, except for the special exhibition room and the shop, the rest of the South Wing saw a major transformation.
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maps depict the development of Walton Museum between 2008 and 2012. Massive
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changes
took place in
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just
four years. In 2008, the South wing had two
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storeys
with a path on the west of it. On the
first
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floor
, there was a special exhibition
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room
, a shop and a cloakroom. The entrance and reception were on the second
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floor
. Stairs were there between the shop and the cloakroom.
Next
to
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reception


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was
a reading
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room
. By the year 2012, this building had four
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storeys
with a lift from the
first
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floor
to the top
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floor
. Children’s play area was there in place of the cloakroom, which was
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moved
to the reception. On the second
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floor
, a self-service café
was opened
towards the eastern side of the lift
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above
the reading
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room
. On the west of the lift,
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above
the reception and cloakroom, a restaurant
was constructed
. Another exhibition
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room
was built
on the topmost
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floor
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above
the café.
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Above
the special exhibition
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room
, an entrance hall
was made
, which had a terrace
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above
it.

Overall
,
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except for
the special exhibition
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room
and the shop, the rest of the South Wing
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saw
a major transformation.

IELTS academic The pictures below show the plan of Walton Museum in 2008 and the plan in 2012, after it was redeveloped.

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6.0
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