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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. qPJa
The picture illustrates getting the information on weather to produce data for forecasts. Generally, there are some steps to have incoming information to input in the computer. Furthermore, audiences can hear the information through different broadcasts. Initially, the satellite photo is received from a satellite for the analysing and forecasting the weather, while the radar screen is obtained from satellite, continuing to radar to obtain the information. Afterwards, there are three information resources sent to synoptic chart, and those can be seen through satellite, radar, and drifting buoy. Then, all of information is collected to the computer. In the next stages, the computer personates the preparing broadcast for the TV, radio, and recorded announcement. In the TV, a newsreader gives the information to audiences living in houses, while the radio transmits the forecast to audiences in the car or living sea areas. Moreover, if people are in the military base or malls, they will hear the weather forecast through recorded announcement.
The picture illustrates getting the
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information
on weather to produce data for forecasts.

Generally
, there are
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some
steps to have incoming
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information
to input
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in the computer
.
Furthermore
, audiences can hear the
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information
through
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different
broadcasts.

Initially
, the satellite photo
is received
from a satellite for the
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analysing
and forecasting the weather, while the radar screen
is obtained
from satellite, continuing to radar to obtain the
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information
. Afterwards, there are three
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information
resources
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sent
to synoptic chart, and those can be
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seen
through satellite, radar, and drifting buoy. Then, all of
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information
is collected
to the computer.

In the
next
stages, the computer
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personates
the preparing broadcast for the TV, radio, and recorded announcement.
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the TV".
In the TV
, a newsreader gives the
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information
to audiences living in
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houses
, while the radio transmits the forecast to audiences in the car or living sea areas.
Moreover
, if
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people
are in the military base or malls, they will hear the weather forecast through recorded announcement.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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4 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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