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The given illustration compares the map of an American town in 2010 with that of 1948.

The given illustration compares the map of an American town in 2010 with that of 1948. PGKd
The given illustration compares the map of an American town in 2010 with that of 1948. Analyzing the town in both 1948 and 2010, it is obvious that despite some general changes like the relocation of buildings or the establishment of new facilities, its main structure remained almost the same. As can be seen, residential apartments in the south-east corner of the town were untouched, and it is the same for the streets of the town and the canal. Moreover, the trees of the town were not chopped-down for new constructions. It is worth noticing that the petrol station down the streets, which run south-west to north-east, was not demolished or repositioned. Looking further at the maps, many changes took place during the period. The supermarket was relocated and the church was demolished to make way for a sports stadium. The residential houses located at the corner of the main streets were knocked down in order to build two commercial structures. Furthermore, in 2010 there is an airport, located in the eastern part, the place where four factories were running in 1948. The presence of commercial buildings in 2010 is noticeable while houses and factories were predominant in 1948’s map.
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in 2010 with that of 1948. Analyzing the
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town
in both 1948 and 2010, it is obvious that despite
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general
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changes
like the relocation of buildings or the establishment of new facilities, its main structure remained almost the same.

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seen
, residential apartments in the south-east corner of the
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town
were untouched
, and it is the same for the streets of the
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town
and the canal.
Moreover
, the trees of the
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town
were not chopped-down for new constructions. It is worth noticing that the petrol station down the streets, which run south-west to north-east, was not demolished or repositioned.

Looking
further
at the maps,
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many
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changes
took place during the period. The supermarket
was relocated
and the church
was demolished
to
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make
way for a sports stadium. The residential
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houses
located at the corner of the main streets
were knocked
down in order to build two commercial structures.
Furthermore
, in 2010 there is an airport, located in the eastern part, the place where four factories were running in 1948. The presence of commercial buildings in 2010 is noticeable while
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houses
and factories were predominant in 1948’s map.

IELTS academic The given illustration compares the map of an American town in 2010 with that of 1948.

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  American English
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