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he map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

he map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. oBNK

The two maps depict the pre-construction and post construction images of the town in America for the year 1948 and 2010. In general, it appears that town has become a modern city with far more airport and sport stadium facilities. To commence with, factories were located in the north-east corner and petrol station was opposite to industrial area in the north direction. There was local market for shopping in the south-west side near to canal. Moreover, residential houses were in the centre of city and mostly in the east direction. A church was in the south corner. The main road was running west to east direction. Moving ahead, in 2010 local supermarket, recreational place and factories were demolished. The commercial buildings were constructed in place of factories, centre houses and supermarket. However, airport was also constructed in north east side instead of industries site. The new sports stadium was build and old building of church was removed in modern city. Petrol and house on the east side were on the same side.

The two maps depict the Possible spelling mistake found.reconstructionReconstruction
pre-construction
 and post construction images of the town in America for the year 1948 and 2010.

In general
, it appears that town has become a modern city with far more airport and sport stadium facilities.

To commence with, factories were located
 in the north-east corner and petrol station was opposite to industrial area in the north direction. There was local market for shopping in the south-west side near to canal. Moreover
, residential This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residences
houses
 were in the Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 of city and mostly
 in the east direction. A church was in the south corner. The main road was running west to east direction.

Moving ahead, in 2010 local supermarket, recreational place and factories were demolished
. The commercial buildings were constructed
 in place of factories, Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residences
houses
 and supermarket. However
, airport was also
 constructed in This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.north-eastnortheast
north east
 side instead
 of industries site. The new sports stadium was build and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 building of church was removed
 in modern city. Petrol and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 on the east side were on the same side. 

IELTS academic he map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

172 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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