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he map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

he map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. oBNK
The two maps depict the pre-construction and post construction images of the town in America for the year 1948 and 2010. In general, it appears that town has become a modern city with far more airport and sport stadium facilities. To commence with, factories were located in the north-east corner and petrol station was opposite to industrial area in the north direction. There was local market for shopping in the south-west side near to canal. Moreover, residential houses were in the centre of city and mostly in the east direction. A church was in the south corner. The main road was running west to east direction. Moving ahead, in 2010 local supermarket, recreational place and factories were demolished. The commercial buildings were constructed in place of factories, centre houses and supermarket. However, airport was also constructed in north east side instead of industries site. The new sports stadium was build and old building of church was removed in modern city. Petrol and house on the east side were on the same side.
The two maps depict the
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pre-construction
and post construction images of the town in America for the year 1948 and 2010.

In general
, it appears that town has become a modern city with far more airport and sport stadium facilities.

To commence with, factories
were located
in the north-east corner and petrol station was opposite to industrial area in the north direction. There was local market for shopping in the south-west side near to canal.
Moreover
, residential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
were in the
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centre
of city and
mostly
in the east direction. A church was in the south corner. The main road was running west to east direction.

Moving ahead, in 2010 local supermarket, recreational place and factories
were demolished
. The commercial buildings
were constructed
in place of factories,
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
and supermarket.
However
, airport was
also
constructed in
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
north east
side
instead
of industries site. The new sports stadium was build and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
building of church
was removed
in modern city. Petrol and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
on the east side were on the same side.
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