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The bar graph shows the information of Australian men and women who did physical activity.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian natives based on genders of different six age brackets participated in regular exercise for a specific year 2010. Overall, as per the sight, it is clear from the graph, the percentage of Australian women who did regular physical activity was maximum for all age groups except youngsters, while, the men's participation in this activity was less comparatively in a given period. Interestingly, it is an observed that more the young adults women's took participate in physical exercise for living a healthy lifestyle. To begin with the percentage of males who took part in regular exercising, about 52. 8% of males aged between 15 and 24 years were doing this, whereas, the figure decreased slightly to 39. 5% for age bracket of 35 to 44 years. Moreover, the proportion was again went to 46. 7% for people having age 65 and over. The females participation was maximum in this activity, initially it was 47. 7% for age group between 15 to 24 years. After this point, the proportion of women's who did physical activity regularly increased to 53. 3% for middle aged between 45 and 54 years. For those aged 65 and over, the figure declined by 6%.

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