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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011†. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011â€. doql2
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of expenditure spent by the urban chinese on different categories in 1955 and 2011. Overall, the urban chinese spent the most on food in both 1955 and 2011. In regards to other categories such as clothing, residential, recreation, transportation, others and medicine they all changed either by an increase or decrease over the given periods. Whereas, only household facilities remained the same. Food consumption of the urban chinese occupied about half of the total consumption in 1995 at 50% but had reduced significantly to 36% as at 2011. The catergories that increased or decreased slightly over the years (from 1995 to 2011) include: others(from 3% to 4%), residential(from 8% to 9%), recreation( from 10% to 12%), clothing( from 14% dropped to 11%). While household facilities remained the same from 1995 till 2011. As for the consumption of the rest of the categories, they increased dramatically over the years. Transportation, which was 5% in 1955 rose to about 14% in 2011. Also, the consumption of medicine was at 3% but increased to 7% in 2011.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of expenditure spent by the urban
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chinese
on
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categories in 1955 and 2011.

Overall
, the urban
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chinese
spent the most on food in both 1955 and 2011.
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In regards to
other categories such as clothing, residential, recreation, transportation, others and medicine they all
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changed
either by an increase or decrease over the
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given
periods.
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Whereas
,
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only
household facilities remained the same.

Food
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consumption
of the urban
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chinese
occupied about half of the total
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consumption
in 1995 at 50%
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but
had
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reduced
significantly
to 36% as at 2011. The
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catergories
that increased or decreased
slightly
over the years (from 1995 to 2011) include: others(from 3% to 4%), residential(from 8% to 9%), recreation
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from 10% to 12%), clothing
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from 14% dropped to 11%).
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While
household facilities remained the same
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from 1995 till 2011
.

As for the
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consumption
of the rest of the categories, they increased
dramatically
over the years. Transportation, which was 5% in 1955 rose to about 14% in 2011.
Also
, the
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consumption
of medicine was at 3%
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but
increased to 7% in 2011.
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