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The diagram below indicates major changes that has taken place since the construction in 1950.

The diagram below indicates major changes that has taken place since the construction in 1950. 95reX
The diagram below indicates major changes that has taken place since the construction in 1950. First of all, the main road remains the same throughout the years, 1950-2010. The school has undergone changes three times before it has finally setlled in 2010. In the year 1950, the land was sectioned in 4 parts which included multiple houses, farmland, playground and the school itself. Almost 30 years later, the construction that took place in 1980 replaced the farmland with sports field and added two new sections which overtook the houses, car park and science block whilst the playground and school remained the same. Meanwhile, a drastic change occurred in 2010. Starting with the science block and the school remaining the same while the playground and sports field shortened in size resulting in a take over from the playground in 1980's now and split in two sections. Finally, the car park area doubled and took over the sports field from 30 years ago. As you can see in the diagram, there are now 5 sperate sections in the land.
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that has taken place since the construction in 1950.
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First of all
, the main road remains the same throughout the years, 1950-2010. The
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school
has undergone
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changes
three times
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before
it has
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setlled
in 2010. In the
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year
1950, the land
was sectioned
in 4 parts which included multiple
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houses
, farmland,
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playground
and the
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school
itself. Almost 30 years later, the construction that took place in 1980 replaced the farmland with sports field and
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added
two new sections which overtook the
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houses
, car park and science block whilst the
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playground
and
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school
remained the same. Meanwhile, a drastic
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change
occurred in 2010. Starting with the science block and the
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school
remaining the same while the
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playground
and sports field shortened in size resulting in a take over from the
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playground
The article is probably missing here: "in the 1980's".
in 1980's
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now
and split in two sections.
Finally
, the car park area doubled and took over the sports field from 30 years ago. As you can
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see
in the diagram, there are
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now
5
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sperate
sections in the land.
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IELTS academic The diagram below indicates major changes that has taken place since the construction in 1950.

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