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the data given in this line graph illustrates number of different spreads used by peoples throughout the world, from 1981 to 2007. at the first glance we can see some noticeable changes. overall, in the beginning butter was significantly spread on the bread. however, this ratio hit a sever low after 1981. while amount of butter gradually decrease, the amount of other spreads increase in latter periods. Butter severely climb down from 140 grams to about 45% in 2007. it decreased continuously after the period of 1986. meanwhile, the other spreads like margarine, low and reduced fats, inclined. in 1981 margarine begin from over 80 grams, and experienced fluctuations, before ending at the value of 40 grams, less than from its early amount. low fats and reduced spreads experienced steady upward trend till 2001, IN 1996 it was only sum up for one in ten. IT ROSE TO OVER 80 GRAMS IN 2001. FURTHERMORE, IT DROP AGAIN IN 2007 AND STOOD AT NEAR 65 GRAMS IN THE END
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