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the contribution of agricultures, manufacturing, and business and financial services to the UK economy in the twentieth century

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The graph illustrates the contribution of agricultures, manufacturing, and business and financial services to the UK economy in the twentieth century. There were significant changes in all three sectors during the period. For agriculture sector, the contribution to the UK economy was notably high in 1900, then slightly rose to 50 percent in 1950. However, in 1975, the contribution of agriculture dropped significantly to only 10 percent and continued decreasing to 5 percent in 2000. Similarly, the contribution of manufacturing was quite high. In 1900, it was 45 percent, then decreased slightly to 40 percent in 1950. In 1975 and 2000, manufacturing’s contribution declined steadily to 35 percent and 15 percent, respectively. In contrast, there was an upward trend of business and financial contribution. In 1900, the contribution was significantly low at 5 percent, then it started increasing steadily to 10 percent in 1950, 20 percent in 1975, and 35 percent in 2000. Overall, while there was a downward trend of agriculture and manufacturing, the contribution of business and financial rose steadily during the period.
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agricultures
,
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manufacturing
, and business and financial services to the UK economy in the twentieth century. There were significant
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changes
in all three sectors during the period.

For
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agriculture
sector, the
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contribution
to the UK economy was
notably
high in 1900, then
slightly
rose to 50
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percent
in 1950.
However
, in 1975, the
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of
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agriculture
dropped
significantly
to
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only
10
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percent
and continued decreasing to 5
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percent
in 2000.

Similarly
, the
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contribution
of
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manufacturing
was quite high. In 1900, it was 45
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percent
, then decreased
slightly
to 40
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percent
in 1950. In 1975 and 2000,
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manufacturing’s
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contribution
declined
steadily
to 35
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percent
and 15
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percent
,
respectively
.

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In
contrast, there was an upward trend of business and financial
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In
1900, the
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was
significantly
low at 5
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percent
, then it
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started
increasing
steadily
to 10
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percent
in 1950, 20
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percent
in 1975, and 35
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percent
in 2000.

Overall
, while there was a downward trend of
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agriculture
and
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manufacturing
, the
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contribution
of business and financial rose
steadily
during the period.
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IELTS academic the contribution of agricultures, manufacturing, and business and financial services to the UK economy in the twentieth century

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