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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. XxyA
The chart illustrates the percentage of Jobseeker in the year 2012 in Australia. we can clearly see in the graph that there is more percentile of jobless people in rural areas compared to the urban areas. In the rural areas the first quarter of the year 2012, the percentage of jobseekers is more than 6% and in the second part, of the year is 4. 5%. and then increased in the third quarter up to 5. 5% and decreased to 5% in the fourth quarter and is constant throughout the end of the year. In urban areas, the first quarter of the year 2012 the percentage of jobseekers is more than 5% and in the second part, of the year is more than 3%. In the third quarter of the year, it is just above 2%. and at the end of the year, it increased rapidly up to 4. 9% Overall we can see in starting of the year 2012 the number of job seekers or more but at the end of the year, they decreased. whereas the jobseekers in urban areas in the first quarter is less than end of the year.
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2012 in Australia.
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2012, the percentage of
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up to 5. 5% and decreased to 5% in the fourth
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2012 the percentage of
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IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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