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The circular chart illustrates the information about water consumption for residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and in worldwide.

The circular chart illustrates the information about water consumption for residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and in worldwide. R5KXV
Overall, it can be vividly manifested that the highest water utilization in worldwide in agriculture field. Whereas, opposite trend followed by others. In detail, in San Diego nation mammoth water consumption notice in residential field which, was more than half while, for industry and agriculture 17% to 20% respectively. Apart from this, in California 39% water usage manifested in residential fields. However, a large decline seen in the agriculture field. It was more than twenty percent and, 33% water used by California for industry. Moving to the rest of data, 69% water employment comprised in agriculture. Whilst a dramatic decrease noticed in the industry there had been merely less than quarter(23%). Nevertheless, lastly sharply went down noticed in industrial field. It was barely 8%.
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utilization in worldwide in
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, opposite trend followed by others. In detail, in San Diego nation mammoth
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consumption notice in residential
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which, was more than half while, for industry and
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17% to 20%
respectively
. Apart from this, in California 39%
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usage manifested in residential
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fields
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in the
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. It was more than twenty percent and, 33%
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used
by California for industry. Moving to the rest of data, 69%
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employment comprised in
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. Whilst a dramatic decrease noticed in the industry there had been
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IELTS academic The circular chart illustrates the information about water consumption for residential, industry and agriculture in San Diego, California and in worldwide.

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