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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010. N5yq
A glance at the charts provided compares the proportion of people working in town A and town B in three different fields between 1960 and 2010. A particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that despite experiencing a decrease, people in the sale sector was by far highest rather than other fields in town A and town B. In detail, in 1960, the figure for people working in the sale was the most common in town A and town B, accounting at 41% and 70%, respectively. Meanwhile, the percentage of those in manufacturing was 29% in town A, which was nearly triple than the figure of town B. In terms of the service, accounting for 30% of town A, slightly higher than 20% of town B. In 2010, instead of a half decrease in both proportion of the sale and service was an exponential increase by 35% of those working in the manufacturing sector in the town A. However, there was a substantial drop to 53% in the figure for sale, followed by a slight decrease by 2% of the service. Opposite the trend is to increase rapidly to 25% of the figure for people working in the manufacturing in the town B
A glance at the charts provided compares the proportion of
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A and
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In detail, in 1960, the
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people
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A and
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B, accounting at 41% and 70%,
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B. In terms of the service, accounting for 30% of
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A,
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B.

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and service was an exponential increase by 35% of those
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in the manufacturing sector in the
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A.
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, there was a substantial drop to 53% in the
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for
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, followed by a slight decrease by 2% of the service. Opposite the trend is to increase
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IELTS academic The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

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