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The charts show the main methods of people traveling to one university in 2004 and 2009

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The pie charts indicate the comparison of different means of transport of people to one university in two years. In general, the percentage of people traveling by bicycles, and buses increased significantly during the period shown. By contrast, the figure for other methods had the opposite trend. In 2004, it can be seen that the proportion of using car accounted for a haft of the methods, at 51%. The figure for bicycle and bus were slightly lower, around 9% and 33% respectively. Meanwhile, only about 4% of people chose train and walking to travel. In 2009, the percentage of people who used bus increase significantly and remained the highest figure in the chart, at 46%. Additionally, there was a slight growth in the figure for bicycle, train, and walking. In contrast, the rate of people using car fell by approximately 28%.
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to one university in two years.

In general
, the percentage of
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traveling by bicycles, and buses increased
significantly
during the period shown. By contrast, the
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for other methods had the opposite trend.

In 2004, it can be
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that the proportion of using car accounted for a haft of the methods, at 51%. The
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figure
for bicycle and bus were
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lower, around 9% and 33%
respectively
. Meanwhile,
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about 4% of
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chose train and walking to travel.

In 2009, the percentage of
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who
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bus increase
significantly
and remained the highest
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in the chart, at 46%.
Additionally
, there was a slight growth in the
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for bicycle, train, and walking.
In contrast
, the rate of
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people
using car fell by approximately 28%.
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