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The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates chose their degree, and employer's reasons for hiring them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates chose their degree, and employer's reasons for hiring them. 7aJqy
The pie charts gives the information about the reasons for MBA students to select their degree and the factors that the employers are considering to hire those graduates. Overall, the majority of students are having a thought that they can have better job opportunities and least are choosing to help others. As far as the employers reasons are concerned, they are hiring people who are having the better personalities or with a good experence in knowledge. They are least bothered about the qualification that the students are holding. On one hand, huge proportion of students that make up to 65% are finding a reason of getting good jobs. However, Ability to help others and for improving personality are having a little difference in their population with the proportions of 8% and 12% respectively. Students are least considered for helping other with the figure of 8%. On the other hand, employers are giving more mportance to personality of student and previous experience in knowledge. Both the factors are occupying quarter portion of each. With less about 5% difference, presentation or appearence and previous experience in connections are equally considered. Qulaifications plays a least role of 10% in whole.
The pie charts gives the information about the reasons for MBA
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students
to select their degree and the factors that the employers are considering to hire those graduates.

Overall
, the majority of
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students
are having a
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thought
that they can have better job opportunities and least are choosing to
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help
others. As far as the employers reasons
are concerned
, they are hiring
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people
who are having the better personalities or with a
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good
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experence
in knowledge. They are least bothered about the qualification that the
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students
are holding.

On one hand, huge proportion of
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students
that
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make
up to 65% are finding a reason of getting
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good
jobs.
However
, Ability to
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help
others and for improving personality are having a
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little
difference in their population with the proportions of 8% and 12%
respectively
.
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Students
are least considered for helping
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other
with the figure of 8%.

On the
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other
hand, employers are giving more
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mportance
to personality of
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student
and previous experience in knowledge. Both the factors are occupying quarter portion of each. With less about 5% difference, presentation or
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appearence
and previous experience in connections are
equally
considered.
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Qulaifications
plays
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least role of 10% in whole.

IELTS academic The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates chose their degree, and employer's reasons for hiring them.

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4 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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