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The given two pie charts illustrates the outcomes of a survey conducted to know about MBA graduates and reason why they opted that degree and job provider's reasons for selecting them.

The given two pie charts illustrates the outcomes of a survey conducted to know about MBA graduates and reason why they opted that degree and job provider's reasons for selecting them. VBlaJ
The given two pie charts illustrates the outcomes of a survey conducted to know about MBA graduates and reason why they opted that degree and job provider's reasons for selecting them. overall, majority of MBA graduate students told that they have selected this degree for better job opportunities and on the other hand, employers look for personality and previous experience on knowledge for thier hiring. firslty, when 65% of students opted their degree for better job opportunities only 8% had choosen for helping others. when it comes to ability to do the job better only 15 % of total graduates found to select that. for the sake of personality development we can see there is only 12% graduates voting that. Secondly, when we talk about employers and their reasons for hiring the students then their first importance goes to personality and prior expreience which is voted 25% from the whole. presentation and appearance of students is considered 20% and qualifications only voted 10%.
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for helping others.
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found to select that.
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IELTS academic The given two pie charts illustrates the outcomes of a survey conducted to know about MBA graduates and reason why they opted that degree and job provider's reasons for selecting them.

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163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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