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[4/6, 7:12 PM] kmary8629: Is a static data No unit of data [4/6, 7:12 PM] kmary8629: The charts give account of the actions of the UK graduates and post graduated after collage in 2008,centering on those that did not g o into fulltime employment. Overall,it can be seen that majority of the UK undergraduates and postgraduates in 2008 not including those that went into fulltime work went for further studies while very little number did voluntary services To begin,the number of undergraduates that went into further studies top the list with 29,665,followed by 17.735 undergraduates that preferred part time work .16,235 undergraduates students in 2008 were unemployed while 3,500 graduates choosed voluntary work. Further more,for post graduates in that same year,2,725 of them also went in for further studies and this figure was the highest for that year.Also,2,535 post graduates did part times jobs while 1.625 were unemployed.on the contrary,very small number choosed to work for

[4/6, 7: 12 PM] kmary8629: Is a static data No unit of data [4/6, 7: 12 PM] kmary8629: The charts give account of the actions of the UK graduates and post graduated after collage in 2008, centering on those that did not g o into fulltime employment. Overall, it can be seen that majority of the UK undergraduates and postgraduates in 2008 not including those that went into fulltime work went for further studies while very little number did voluntary services To begin, the number of undergraduates that went into further studies top the list with 29, 665, followed by 17. 735 undergraduates that preferred part time work. 16, 235 undergraduates students in 2008 were unemployed while 3, 500 graduates choosed voluntary work. Further more, for post graduates in that same year, 2, 725 of them also went in for further studies and this figure was the highest for that year. Also, 2, 535 post graduates did part times jobs while 1. 625 were unemployed. on the contrary, very small number choosed to work for OVMa7
The charts give account of the actions of the UK graduates and post graduated after collage in 2008, centering on those that did not g o into fulltime employment. Overall, it can be seen that majority of the UK undergraduates and postgraduates in 2008 not including those that went into fulltime work went for further studies while very little number did voluntary services To begin, the number of undergraduates that went into further studies top the list with 29, 665, followed by 17. 735 undergraduates that preferred part time work. 16, 235 undergraduates students in 2008 were unemployed while 3, 500 graduates choosed voluntary work. Further more, for post graduates in that same year, 2, 725 of them also went in for further studies and this figure was the highest for that year. Also, 2, 535 post graduates did part times jobs while 1. 625 were unemployed. on the contrary, very small number choosed to work for free
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IELTS academic [4/6, 7: 12 PM] kmary8629: Is a static data No unit of data [4/6, 7: 12 PM] kmary8629: The charts give account of the actions of the UK graduates and post graduated after collage in 2008, centering on those that did not g o into fulltime employment. Overall, it can be seen that majority of the UK undergraduates and postgraduates in 2008 not including those that went into fulltime work went for further studies while very little number did voluntary services To begin, the number of undergraduates that went into further studies top the list with 29, 665, followed by 17. 735 undergraduates that preferred part time work. 16, 235 undergraduates students in 2008 were unemployed while 3, 500 graduates choosed voluntary work. Further more, for post graduates in that same year, 2, 725 of them also went in for further studies and this figure was the highest for that year. Also, 2, 535 post graduates did part times jobs while 1. 625 were unemployed. on the contrary, very small number choosed to work for

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