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The charts show school expenditure and the proportion of students who gained higher education diplomas and degrees in Singapore from 2000 to 2012.

The charts show school expenditure and the proportion of students who gained higher education diplomas and degrees in Singapore from 2000 to 2012. jdxa1
The given charts illustrate the data of total school spending in Singapore as well as the percentages of Singaporean students in higher education gaining degrees and diplomas over a 12-year period, starting from 2000. Overall, it is evident that the total school expenditure grew during this period. According to the pie chart, the proportion of students gaining diplomas in Singapore was higher than those of degrees. In 2000, roughly $9 was paid out for boys school, compared to merely $7 for girls. The figure for boys underwent an upward trend during 12 years, reached a peak of over $30 in 2012. Those for girls also shared a similar trend in which it rose slightly of $5 in the first 4 years, before staying stable in the next years and doubling to exactly $20 at the end of the surveyed period. With regard to the two pie charts, there was an increase in the proportion of degree holders. In 2000, about 73% of students were diploma owners, triple that of those achieving degrees. After 12 years, the figure for degree holders experienced a minimal drop, whereas that for diploma receivers rose to 32%.
The
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charts illustrate the data of total school spending in Singapore
as well
as the percentages of Singaporean students in higher education gaining
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degrees
and
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diplomas
over a
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12-year
period, starting from 2000.

Overall
, it is evident that the total school expenditure grew during this period. According to the pie chart, the proportion of students gaining
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diplomas
in Singapore was higher than those of degrees.

In 2000, roughly $9
was paid
out for boys school, compared to
merely
$7 for girls. The figure for boys underwent an upward trend during 12 years, reached a peak of over $30 in 2012. Those for girls
also
shared a similar trend in which it rose
slightly
of $5 in the
first
4 years,
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before
staying stable in the
next
years and doubling to exactly $20 at the
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end
of the surveyed period.

With regard to the two pie charts, there was an increase in the proportion of
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degree
holders. In 2000, about 73% of students were
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diploma
owners, triple that of those achieving
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degrees
. After 12 years, the figure for
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degree
holders experienced a minimal drop, whereas that for
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diploma
receivers rose to 32%.
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IELTS academic The charts show school expenditure and the proportion of students who gained higher education diplomas and degrees in Singapore from 2000 to 2012.

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