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The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000.

The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. RygxQ
The diagrams show the alternations of this city at two different stages between 1700 and 2000. The first picture is describing what the city likes at 1700. It is obvious to see that a overpass across the river and a road join with the link. On the left side of the overpass, it was a large side of farmland. Across to the river, there was the woods growing at the right side of the platform which separates the castle and market neighborhood. At 2000, it is clear that the community has an earthshaking change in 300 years. We can easily find that a bypath was added to the original link and a set of building was built on the quondam farmland. The market house was disappearing and the castle was replaced by a school. In the behind by the new school, a railway was constructed to convenient daily life. Several changes took point in this city. The first one is a bypath was added to the bridge, it is good to lighten the loan on the main platform. The second one is the castle has been demolished in order to make the way for a new school. What’s more, the market zone was disappeared in 300 years.
The diagrams
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the alternations of this city at two
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different
stages between 1700 and 2000.

The
first
picture is describing what the city likes at 1700. It is obvious to
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see
that
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a
overpass across the river and a road
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join
with the link. On the
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left
side of the overpass, it was a large side of farmland. Across to the river, there was the woods growing
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at the right side
of the platform which separates the castle and market neighborhood.

At 2000, it is
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clear
that the community has an earthshaking
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change
in 300 years. We can
easily
find that a bypath was
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added
to the original link and a set of building
was built
on the quondam farmland. The market
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house
was disappearing and the castle
was replaced
by a school. In the behind by the new school, a railway
was constructed
to convenient daily life.

Several
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changes
took point in this city. The
first
one is a bypath was
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added
to the bridge, it is
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good
to lighten the loan on the main platform. The second one is the castle has
been demolished
in order to
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make
the way for a new school. What’s more, the market zone
was disappeared
in 300 years.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000.

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4 paragraphs
207 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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