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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

These two bay charts show the number of speed radars, and accident and deaths by percent in Melbourne's Road in duration between 2002 - 2005. For the number of speed cameras we have a continues increasing from 2002 untill 2005, by the first year, 2002, we nearly have thirty cameras in roads and that number will rise to forty radars in 2003. The number will continue in increasing up to seventy cameras in 2004 and in biggest jump will be in last year we have here, 2005, and the number will reach at 145 cameras in Melbourne's road. On the other hand we have the accidents and deaths. First year we have about 3 percent of people who drive have been in accidrnt and 0. 7% of them died. By the next year we have the percentage of accident and less in deaths by 0. 1%. And in 2004 we have bigger per cent in both by 3. 7 percent in accidents and one percent at deaths and the next year and the last year we have, 2005, we have 3. 9 percentage in accidents and 1. 1% in deaths. To sum up, ther are a related between increase the number of cameras and inrcrease the percent of accident and deaths and we must to study to see if that related is true or not.
These two bay charts
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show
the
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number
of speed radars, and
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accident
and deaths by
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percent
in Melbourne's
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Road in duration
between
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2002 - 2005
.

For the
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number
of speed
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cameras
we have a continues increasing from 2002
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untill
2005, by the
first
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year
, 2002, we
nearly
have thirty
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cameras
in roads and that
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number
will rise to forty radars in 2003. The
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number
will continue in increasing up to seventy
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cameras
in 2004 and in
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biggest
jump will be in last
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year
we have here, 2005, and the
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number
will reach at 145
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cameras
in Melbourne's road.

On the other hand
we have the
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accidents
and deaths.
First
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year
we have about 3
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percent
of
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people
who drive have been in
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accidrnt
and 0. 7% of them
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died
. By the
next
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year
we have the percentage of
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accident
and less in deaths by 0. 1%. And in 2004 we have bigger per cent in both by 3. 7
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percent
in
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accidents
and one
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percent
at deaths and the
next
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year
and the last
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year
we have, 2005, we have 3. 9 percentage in
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accidents
and 1. 1% in deaths.

To sum up,
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ther are
a related between increase the
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number
of
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cameras
and
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inrcrease
the
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percent
of
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accident
and
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deaths and
we
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must to
study to
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see
if that related is true or not.
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IELTS academic The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
225 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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