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The charts show information about the percentage of destinations of nursing graduates in the United Kingdom and working in the health sector in 2009.

The charts show information about the percentage of destinations of nursing graduates in the United Kingdom and working in the health sector in 2009. gYraO
The charts outline the percentage of destinations of nursing graduates in the United Kingdom and working in the health sector in 2009. Especially, the proportion of nursing worked in the health sector which was the highest. Almost all people who worked in there applied for in hospital. Looking at the first chart in 2009 in more detail, the figure for working in the health sector was 84% while the ratio of working and studying was 8%. Next, the percentage of further study was the same as the proportion of other with 2% while the figure for unemployed doubled twice those. Followed by the second chart, 72, 9% was seen in the percentage of hospital nurses whereas 0, 4% was the lowest which was shown in the proportion of mental nurse. Next, the data of midwives, community nurses, paramedic and other were under 15% with 12, 4%, 10, 3%, 1, 3%, 2, 7% respectively.
The charts outline the percentage of destinations of nursing graduates in the United Kingdom and working in the health sector in 2009.
Especially
, the proportion of nursing worked in the health sector which was the highest. Almost all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who worked in there applied for in hospital.

Looking at the
first
chart in 2009 in more detail, the figure for working in the health sector was 84% while the ratio of working and studying was 8%.
Next
, the percentage of
further
study was the same as the proportion of other with 2% while the figure for unemployed doubled twice those.

Followed by the second chart, 72, 9% was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in the percentage of hospital nurses whereas 0, 4% was the lowest which
was shown
in the proportion of mental nurse.
Next
, the data of midwives, community nurses, paramedic and other were under 15% with 12, 4%, 10, 3%, 1, 3%, 2, 7%
respectively
.

IELTS academic The charts show information about the percentage of destinations of nursing graduates in the United Kingdom and working in the health sector in 2009.

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