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The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in France, United States, Japan and Germany between 1960 to 2015.

The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in France, United States, Japan and Germany between 1960 to 2015. 3ARkl

The Line graph illustrates the percentage of grown-up people in the labor force in France, the United States, Japan, and Germany between 1960 to 2015. Overall, France and the United States had more employment age than Japan and Germany, although they had a decline to an active labor force with future predictions. In terms of Japan and Germany, a significant proportion of retired people rose to a peak in 1990, despite Germany experiencing a sharp fall to an employable age at 55% in 2050. Japan fell dramatically with some fluctuations into more than half of the population around 2020 to a future prediction. On the other hand, more than three-fifths of the working age in France increased slightly to retirement age but fell dramatically to active people in the industry around 2010 to 2050. While three-fifths of active citizens in employment in the United States rose to a significant proportion of retired adults around 2020 but declined to 60% of employable age and remain plateau into future projection.

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