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Describe change in school from construction

Describe change in school from construction 6N0Qr
The three map emphasize the construction and changes that taken place in West park secondary school from 1950 to 2010. Comparing the year of 1950 with the 1980, there was no significant differences among the construction of school but in 1950 there was a one small school building with playground In upcoming years noticeably in 1980 the major difference would be the houses those houses have been replaced by constructing a science block and car parking furthermore the two similarities are main road and playground which is remained the same till 1980 and another replacement was the farmland and it replace with sports field. In 2010 there was a complicated changes have been made. there was an huge extension for car parking area whereas sports field and playground spaces has been reduced slightly for extention of car parking apart from this changes other things remaind same. the major changes since 1950 would be houses and farmland these had been removed completely and it replaced by introducing some facilities like cark parking, sports field and science block have done till 2010
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that taken place in West park secondary school from 1950 to 2010. Comparing the year of 1950 with the 1980, there was no significant differences among the construction of school
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but
in 1950 there was a one
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small
school building with playground In upcoming years
noticeably
in 1980 the major difference would be the
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houses
those
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houses
have
been replaced
by constructing a science block and car
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parking
furthermore
the two similarities are main road and playground which
is remained
the same till 1980 and another replacement was the farmland and it
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replace
with sports field. In 2010 there was a complicated
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changes
have
been made
.
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there
was
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an
huge extension for car
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parking
area whereas sports field and playground spaces has been
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reduced
slightly
for
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extention
of car
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parking
apart from
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this
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changes
other things
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remaind
same.
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the
major
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changes
since 1950 would be
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houses
and farmland these had
been removed
completely and it replaced by introducing
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some
facilities like
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cark
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parking
, sports field and science block have done till 2010

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