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Energy usage in an Australian household

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The first pie chart indicates different ways of energy usage in an average Australian household, while the second chart discusses the greenhouse gas emissions resulting from this energy use. To report the main features, 6 different methods of how energy is used are compared between the Australian household and the gas emitted from it. Regarding this, it is found that energy is mostly used for heating in an Australian household with the percentage of 42% and 15% of greenhouse gas are emitted from this use. The second way of using energy is water heating. Concerning with this, it is shown that 30% of energy is used for this process, resulting in the gas emission of 32%, which is surprisingly greater than that of heating. Energy is also used for other appliances such as artificial lights and sprinklers in green house. Regarding this issue, the pie charts show that 15% of energy is used for such appliances, and 20% of gas is emitted from them. As Australia is a very cold country, they hardly have any use of energy for cooling process, in a way that only 2% is found to be used for this. To conclude, energy may be used for many other processes, but in this essay, 6 different methods of using energy in an Australian household and the resulting gas emissions are summarized and compared.
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usage in an average Australian
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, while the second chart discusses the greenhouse
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emissions resulting from this
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energy
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. To report the main features, 6
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emitted from it. Regarding this, it
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for heating in an Australian
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with the percentage of 42% and 15% of greenhouse
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are emitted
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. The second way of using
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is water heating. Concerning with this, it
is shown
that 30% of
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is
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used
for this process, resulting in the
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emission of 32%, which is
surprisingly
greater than that of heating.
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is
also
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for other appliances such as artificial lights and sprinklers in green
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. Regarding this issue, the pie charts
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for such appliances, and 20% of
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is emitted
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country, they hardly have any
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for cooling process, in a way that
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in this essay, 6
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methods of using
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in an Australian
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and the resulting
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emissions
are summarized
and compared.
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IELTS academic Energy usage in an Australian household

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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