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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50 year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50 year period. 2bM66
The given map charts illustrate the modification of small center in 2010 which become a big town in 2015 and known as Islip. To start with, in 2010 countryside was on the top and houses were built at the bottom on the map. shops surrounding the main road which type of horizontal. School was built in the west while park was made in the east. Mostly, halls of residences was behind the shops and middle in the park and school in 2010. Furthermore, during 2015 the map of center almost changed but school was on at own place. Bus station, shopping centre and car park beside to each others. Old road converted into the pedestrians and shops was also at same place. New road had been built surrounded of the market in 2015. In conclusion, school and some houses had been built on same place while road was all around the market.
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center in 2010 which become a
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big
town in 2015 and known as
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Islip
. To
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start
with, in 2010 countryside was on the top and
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houses
were built
at the bottom on the map.
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shops
surrounding the main
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road
which type of horizontal.
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School
was built
in the west while park
was made
in the east.
Mostly
, halls of residences was behind the shops and middle in the park and
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school
in 2010.
Furthermore
, during 2015 the map of center almost
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changed
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but
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school
was on at
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own
place. Bus station, shopping
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centre
and car park beside to each
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others
.
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Old
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road
converted into the pedestrians and shops was
also
at same place. New
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road
had
been built
surrounded of the market in 2015.
In conclusion
,
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school
and
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some
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houses
had
been built
on same place while
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road
was all around the market.
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