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The charts show how many people went to the cinema and how often they visited it.

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The chart shown below analyses the number of cinema visits on age groups of 14-24, 25-35, 35-49 and 50+. The statistical table also shows from the time period of 1996 to 2000. Predominantly, the trend of the 4 age groups are the same, however the group that has the highest number of visits is 14 -24 compared to the lowest group of 50+. The statistical table shows the attendance increase and decrease slightly over 5 years. In 1996, about 62% of the total population went to the cinema about 10. 3 times a year. This attendance increased to 72% one year later and then remained stable until 1998, despite a fall of 2% from 1998 to 1999, then rose back to 72% in 2000. Meanwhile, the average frequency increased 11. 1 times annually in 1997, but then it stabilized at around 8. 2 to 8. 3 in the 3 more years.
The chart shown below analyses the number of cinema visits on age
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of 14-24, 25-35, 35-49 and 50+. The statistical table
also
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from the time period of 1996 to 2000.

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, the trend of the 4 age
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groups
are the same,
however
the
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that has the highest number of visits is 14 -24 compared to the lowest
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of 50+. The statistical table
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shows
the attendance increase and decrease
slightly
over 5 years.

In 1996, about 62% of the total population went to the cinema about 10. 3 times a year. This attendance increased to 72% one year later and then remained stable until 1998, despite a fall of 2% from 1998 to 1999, then rose back to 72% in 2000. Meanwhile, the average frequency increased 11. 1 times
annually
in 1997,
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then it stabilized at around 8. 2 to 8. 3 in the 3 more years.
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