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The charts illustrate the number of undergraduates in the UK, government spending on each student from 1991 to 2001, and compare the percentages of students from different family economic backgrounds in 1991.

The charts illustrate the number of undergraduates in the UK, government spending on each student from 1991 to 2001, and compare the percentages of students from different family economic backgrounds in 1991. 6dGJK
The given pie chart illustrates the information about the proportion of economic background of students family in 1991, and the bar chart illustrates the number of learners at the UK University from 1991 to 2001 and the line chart illustrates the amount of money spent by government on each pupils between 1991 to 2001. Overall, it is noticed that the maximum students were from the middle income family, however the highest number of student was in 1991 and also government spend highest amount of money on this year. Looking to pie chart, in 1991, the vast majority of students were from middle income background family, which was 62%. Although, a third of students had belong to higher income and near one-in-ten from low-income. Looking to line graph, in 1991, government spent about £6500 on each student, while the spending by authorities was drop dramatic, Near about £5000, and almost shared the same amount till 2001. Looking to the bar chart, the least number of students were at the UK University in 1991, which was above 10, lakh. While, double of learns was in 1999. From 1993 to 1997 students were close to 15, lakh. However, in 2001, the number of students dropped to exactly 20 lakh.
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pie
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illustrates the information about the proportion of economic background of
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students
family in 1991, and the bar
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chart
illustrates the
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number
of learners at the UK University from 1991 to 2001 and the line
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chart
illustrates the amount of money spent by
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government
on each
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pupils
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between 1991 to 2001
.

Overall
, it
is noticed
that the maximum
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students
were from the middle income family,
however
the highest
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number
of
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student
was in 1991 and
also
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government
spend
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highest
amount of money on this year.

Looking to pie
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chart
, in 1991, the vast majority of
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students
were from middle income background family, which was 62%. Although, a third of
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students
had
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belong
to higher income and near one-in-ten from low-income.

Looking to line graph, in 1991,
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government
spent about £6500 on each
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student
, while the spending by authorities was drop dramatic, Near about £5000, and almost shared the same amount till 2001.

Looking to the bar
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chart
, the least
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number
of
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students
were at the UK University in 1991, which was above 10, lakh.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
, double of learns was in 1999. From 1993 to 1997
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students
were close to 15, lakh.
However
, in 2001, the
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number
of
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students
dropped to exactly 20
Possible agreement error. The noun 'lakh' seems to be countable, so consider using: "lakhs".
lakh
.

IELTS academic The charts illustrate the number of undergraduates in the UK, government spending on each student from 1991 to 2001, and compare the percentages of students from different family economic backgrounds in 1991.

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