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The pie charts shows amount of sodium,saturated fats and added sugars in diet of american people. Summarize.

The pie charts shows amount of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in diet of american people. Summarize. m8OPN
The given pie chart illustrates the percentage of sodium, saturated fat and added sugars in diet of an average person in USA. Overall, it can be clearly observed that maximum amount of these unhealthy nutrients are seen in dinner while it is lowest in breakfast. The first chart indicates the amount of sodium intake. The dinner includes 43% of sodium which is higher than other meals of the day. While a similar pattern can be observed in the amount of sodium during breakfast and snacks i. e. , 14%. The second chart shows the amount of saturated fat consumed. This amount is at its peak in dinner with 37%. During lunch, the amount consumed is 26% which is then accompanied by snacks which is at 21%. Breakfast meals data suggests 16% saturated fats consumption. The third chart shows the proportion of added sugars in meals which is higher in snacks with 42% followed by dinner with 23%. The breakfast contributes the consumption of added sugars to 16%. All in all, It is clear that the consumption of these unhealthy nutrients are no less than 14% which can result in various disorders.
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illustrates the percentage of sodium, saturated
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sugars in diet of an average person
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of these unhealthy nutrients are
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in
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while it is lowest in breakfast.

The
first
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indicates the
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of sodium intake. The
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dinner
includes 43% of sodium which is higher than other meals of the day. While a similar pattern can
be observed
in the
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amount
of sodium during breakfast and snacks
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14%.

The second
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the
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of saturated
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consumed. This
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is at its peak in
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dinner
with 37%. During lunch, the
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consumed is 26% which is then accompanied by snacks which is at 21%. Breakfast meals data suggests 16% saturated
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fats
consumption.

The third
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the proportion of
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sugars in meals which is higher in snacks with 42% followed by
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with 23%. The breakfast contributes the consumption of
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added
sugars to 16%.

All in all, It is
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that the consumption of these unhealthy nutrients are no less than 14% which can result in various disorders.

IELTS academic The pie charts shows amount of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in diet of american people. Summarize.

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