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The charts compares the destination of the uk students (other than full-time work)

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The charts compares the destination of the uk students (other than full-time work) right after leaving college in the year 2008. Overall, A numeruous number of graduate students preferred for futher study after completing school, whereas very less students were interested in voluntary work. On the other hand, Part-time work as well as further studies were quite popular destinations for postgraduate scholars. To begin with, In terms of work after college, the most liked work was further studies accounting for approximately 30, 000 graduate students. The numbers of Part-time work, and unemployment was almost similar, with verry little marginal differences. Lastly, The figures of students who went into voluntary work was the lowest compared to others, only 3500 students. On the other hand, Further studies, and part time-work had almost the similar number of students, 2725 for the former, and 2535 for the latter. Likewise, to graduate students voluntary work was the least choosed destination for post graduate scholars, taking up only 345 students.
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the destination of the
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students (other than full-time work)

right after leaving college in the

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year
2008.

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numeruous
number of
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students

preferred for
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study after completing school,

whereas
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very
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less
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students
were interested
in voluntary

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work
.
On the other hand
, Part-time
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work
as
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well


as
further
studies were quite popular destinations

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for
postgraduate scholars.

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after

college, the most liked
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was
further
studies

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accounting
for approximately 30, 000
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graduate
students.

The numbers of Part-time
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work
, and unemployment was

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almost
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marginal differences.

Lastly
, The figures of
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students
who went into

voluntary
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work
was the lowest compared to others,

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only
3500 students.

On the other hand
,
Further
studies, and part

time-work had almost the similar number of
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students, 2725
for the former, and 2535 for the latter.
Likewise
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to
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graduate
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students
voluntary
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work
was the least

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destination for post
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scholars,

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345
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students
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