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The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York over last year

The line graph compares the changes in the income of four cafes in New York over the previous year. Overall, there were two basic trends: upwards and downward. Noticablely, the number of earning for The Tea Room and Wi-fi Cafe fell and increased the most dramatically. In the first month, The Tea Room had the highest income at 160 dollars, compared to just under 100 dollars for Internet Express's earning which was roughly twice as much as the figure for Wi-fi Cafe. The cafe with the lowest income was Cafe Cool, at nearly 30 dollars. The number of money for The Tea Room and Internet Express declined sharply in the first half of year, standing at just over 120 dollars and around 80 dollars respectively. By contrast, Wi-fi Cafe was the only one saw a jump of approximatle 50 dollars in just 6 months and the figure for Cafe Cool remained below 40 dollars untill July. In the rest of months, a suddenly downward trend was continuely witnessed in the earning of The Tea Room which hit a low in December, at about 50 dollars. On the other hand, the income for the other three cafes went up by varying degrees with a peak at 190 dollars for Wi-fi Cafe and from 120 dollars to over 130 dollars for two remain cafes.
The line graph compares the
changes
in the
income
of four
cafes
in New York over the previous year.
Overall
, there were two basic trends: upwards and downward.
Noticablely
, the number of earning for The
Tea
Room
and
Wi-fi
Cafe
fell and increased the most
dramatically
. In the
first
month, The
Tea
Room
had the highest
income
at 160
dollars
, compared to
just
under 100
dollars
for Internet Express's earning which was roughly twice as much as the figure for
Wi-fi
Cafe
. The
cafe
with the lowest
income
was
Cafe
Cool, at
nearly
30
dollars
. The number of money for The
Tea
Room
and Internet Express declined
sharply
in the
first
half of year, standing at
just
over 120
dollars
and around 80
dollars
respectively
. By contrast,
Wi-fi
Cafe
was the
only
one
saw
a jump of
approximatle
50
dollars
in
just
6 months and the figure for
Cafe
Cool remained below 40
dollars
untill
July. In the rest of months, a
suddenly
downward trend was
continuely
witnessed in the earning of The
Tea
Room
which hit a low in December, at about 50
dollars
.
On the other hand
, the
income
for the other three
cafes
went up by varying degrees with a peak at 190
dollars
for
Wi-fi
Cafe
and from 120
dollars
to over 130
dollars
for two remain
cafes
.
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