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The charts below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods on 2010

The bar graph compares the amount of money spent on the different categories in the UK and France in 2010. It is clear that people in both countries spend the highest amount of money on cars. However, the least amount of money went on cameras in France and perfumes in the UK. In term of cars, consumer expenditure was noticeably higher in the UK and France at 45000 pounds and 40000 Pounds respectively. People in the UK also spent more money on Books compared to people in France at 30000 pounds and 40000 ponds respectively. The amount of money spent on cameras in the UK was 35000 Pounds which was the almost double the amount of money spent by people in France. On the other hand, people in France spent more money on rest of items, consumer expenditure on computer was 37000 pounds in France, which this figure was 34000 pound for the UK. The amount of money spent on perfume 20000 pounds in France and 14000 pounds in the UK.
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