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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart provides information about the comparison of the percentage of computer ownership between 2002 and 2010 and it is divided based on education level. It is clear that that the number of people who have computer having an increase each year started on 2002, the percentage just almost 60 percent until on 2010, it reached about 70-80 percent. On 2002, the percentage of computer ownership of the ungraduated high school student just 10 percent while on 2010 it is 40 percent. The difference is quite far and it followed each year. The postgraduate people which means they have higher education own more computer. On 2002, its 70 percent while on 2010 its around 90 percent. The difference still quite far but it isn’t as much as the ungraduated high school student. For summary, the computer ownership had increased steadily from 2002 to 2010. It also followed by their education level. More people who have higher education the more people own a computer.
The bar chart provides information about the comparison of the percentage of computer ownership between 2002 and 2010 and it
is divided
based on
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education
level.

It is
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clear
that that the number of
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people
who have computer having an increase each year
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started
on 2002, the percentage
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just
almost 60
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percent
until on 2010, it reached about 70-80
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percent
. On 2002, the percentage of computer ownership of the ungraduated high school student
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just
10
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percent
while on 2010 it is 40
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percent
. The difference is quite far and it followed each year. The postgraduate
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people
which means they have higher
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education
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own
more computer. On 2002, its 70
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percent
while on 2010 its around 90
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percent
. The difference
still
quite far
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but
it isn’t as much as the ungraduated high school student.

For summary, the computer ownership had increased
steadily
from 2002 to 2010. It
also
followed by their
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education
level. More
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people
who have higher
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education
the more
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people
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own
a computer.

IELTS academic The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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