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The bar graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970, and 1990

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970, and 1990. The bar chart represents a contrast in terms of bus, car, bike, foot in years of 1950, 1970 and 1990. From 1950 to 1990, the percentage of people who travel(替换)by bike and on foot decreased from 27% to 7% and 33% to 10% respectively. Similarly, the percentage of people taking bus dropped after 1970 but increased before that. However, car’s percentage use sharply boomed(增速迅速发展)year after year。(第一组：柱自身比较) Traveling by bike or on foot was most popular in 1950, but percentage of car users was far smaller. After two decades, with the decrease of bike users and travelers on foot, bus and car gain a lot of popularity. Bus reached its peak at 27%. In 1970, over one out of three(替换)people drive to and from work。(替换第二组，柱间比较) All in all, as the economy increases gradually, people prefer to go to work and come home by driving rather than taking bus or walking。 2.
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to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970, and 1990.

The bar chart represents a contrast in terms of bus,
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car
,
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bike
, foot in years of 1950, 1970 and 1990.

From 1950 to 1990, the
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percentage
of
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people
who travel(替换)by
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bike
and on foot decreased from 27% to 7% and 33% to 10%
respectively
.
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of
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people
taking bus dropped after 1970
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increased
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car’s
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use
sharply
boomed(增速迅速发展)year after year。(第一组：柱自身比较)

Traveling by
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or on foot was most popular in 1950,
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but
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percentage
of
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users was far smaller. After two decades, with the decrease of
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bike
users and travelers on foot, bus and
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car
gain
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a lot of
popularity. Bus reached its peak at 27%. In 1970, over one out of three(替换)
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drive to and from work。(替换第二组，柱间比较)

All in all, as the economy increases
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prefer to go to work and
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home by driving
rather
than taking bus or walking。

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IELTS academic The bar graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970, and 1990

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