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The charts below show the working patterns of mothers with young children to care for.

The pie charts illustrate relation between pay attention for children in several aged and mothers working time. Overall, the younger ages of children are, the more their mother attention they get. Hence, the kids become independent when they are getting older. Initially, hovering one in ten mothers becomes part-time workers, taking attention to their children aged 0-2 and 3-4 years, and these are three times less percentages than those who have kids aged 10 years+, at 29% to care for, while children aged 5-9 years are slightly dependent than those the former and the latter cohorts because their mothers take a care just around 14%. Moreover, if the mothers have not jobs, there are around 70% and 54% of them pay attention to children aged 0-2 and 3-4 years, while other ones are almost twice less dependent than those cohorts. However, in the children aged 5-9 and 10+ years more independent, the one decide to have working in a day, accounting for 45% and 48%.
The pie charts illustrate relation between pay
attention
for
children
in several
aged
and mothers working time.

Overall
, the younger ages of
children
are, the more their
mother
attention
they
get
.
Hence
, the kids become independent when they are getting older.

Initially
, hovering one in ten mothers becomes part-time workers, taking
attention
to their
children
aged
0-2 and 3-4 years, and these are three times
less
percentages than those who have kids
aged
10 years+, at 29% to care for, while
children
aged
5-9 years are
slightly
dependent than those the former and the latter cohorts
because
their mothers take a care
just
around 14%.

Moreover
, if the mothers have not jobs, there are around 70% and 54% of them pay
attention
to
children
aged
0-2 and 3-4 years, while other ones are almost twice less dependent than those cohorts.
However
, in the
children
aged
5-9 and 10+ years more independent, the one decide to have working in a day, accounting for 45% and 48%.
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